Ebony Weasley

[Jessica]

The Roleplayer: About You[/U]
Name: Jessica or Jess
Gender: Female(duh!)
Location: The great Land Of The Free
How You Found Us: Neopets

The Character: Basics[/U]
Full Name: Ebony Weasley
Age: 14
Parents' Names: George Weasley and Caroline Weasley-Hart
House at Hogwarts: Gryffindor
Year at Hogwarts: Fourth
Gender: Female
History: It was a sunny day in June,the day Ebony Weasley was born.She had Light Brown hair and sparkling green eyes.Her father always told her stories of the twins` many pranks,during their years at Hogwarts.Than at the age of four,she began helping out in her father`s and uncle`s joke shop,increasing her interest in pranks.She and her cousins always played small matches with a stuffed leather ball,making her an excellent flyer.She pulled pranks on her family,causing her mother to ground.When her Hogwarts letter finally came,her parents were very proud.
Siblings Attending Hogwarts: none
Siblings out of Hogwarts: none

The Character: Appearance[/U]
Eyes: Green
Hair: Long,Wavy,light Brown hair
Piercings: none
Tattoos: none
Celebrity Picture: <imgsrc="http://gallery2.efanguide.com/~rachelhurdwood/albums/userpics/10001/normal_09~10.jpg">
Celebrity Name: Rachel Hurd Wood

The Character: Personality[/U]
Likes:

• Her Parents
  
• Her cousins
  
• Playin jokes
  
• DADA
  

Dislikes:

• Slytherins
  
• Death Eaters
  
• The Headmaster
  
• Lord Voldermort
  
• Potions
  

Good Qualities:

• She is smart most of the time
  
• She can be thoughtful and caring
  
• She is a good friend
  
• She is brave
  

Bad Qualities:

• She never does what she is told
  
• She can be easily angered
  
• She plays pranks
  
• too cocky
  

Overall Personality: Ebony Weasley is very kind hearted most of the time,but she can be easily angered,so do not anger her(especially if you are a Slytherin) or she will go off like a bomb.She is a prankster like her father and has gotten into trouble many times.She is very loyal to her friends and will always stand up for them.She can be very smart when she wants to and she has a really big head.

The Roleplayer: For Administrator[/U]
Favourite Rule: #2
Reason: Because nobody is prefect.

The Roleplayer: Audition[/U]
What It Is: intro
What Genre It Is: Harry Potter:next generation
Where It's From: audition
Roleplaying Sample: Ebony Weasley sat on the train as it rolled past familiar scenery,she sighed thinking about what big prank she should throw when she gets to school,she grinned to herself as ideas began flowing into her head.This would be great year at Hogwarts,like it was every year.Ebony was a chaser on the Gryffindor quidditch team and has been know to give someone a bloody noise.She loved going to hogwarts,despite the fact that Death Eaters ran rampant around the school.She sighed again and looked the window,it was almost time to go to another year of Hogwarts.

[Admin]

Rejected.
There is something that you missed in the rules, and despite the fact that that is one of the big things, there are several other things that I feel I should comment on.
One of my pet peeves is when there is no spacing after punctuation. I don't mean apostrophes, etc., but after your periods, commas, exclamation points, and so on.
This is currently what you have posted;

It was a sunny day in June,the day Ebony Weasley was born.She had Light Brown hair and sparkling green eyes.Her father always told her stories of the twins` many pranks,during their years at Hogwarts.Than at the age of four,she began helping out in her father`s and uncle`s joke shop,increasing her interest in pranks.

It /should/ be;

It was a sunny day in June, the day Ebony Weasley was born. She had Light Brown hair and sparkling green eyes. Her father always told her stories of the twins` many pranks, during their years at Hogwarts. Than at the age of four, she began helping out in her father`s and uncle`s joke shop, increasing her interest in pranks.

It puts less stress on your eyes to read through it.
I also usually prefer that people use proper apostrophes (for instance, "father's and uncle's" rather than "father`s and uncle`s"), although that is a personal preference of mine.
Your History and Overall Personality were much, much too short (I normally ask that they are at least a paragraph longer, although there are certain exceptions). Another thing would be your roleplay sample.
For an introduction, it is much shorter than most others. The rules state that when you are starting a board (which would be what an introduction is used for), you must post at least three paragraphs.
An average paragraph, by Afterward Happenings standards, is ranging from five to ten sentences. That is, at the least, fifteen sentences roughly. Your introduction, as far as I can tell without actually counting, would be less than one whole paragraph.
I am sure that there are typos in there - I spotted several, although none very noticeable, so that's a good thing.
If you could fix all this for me, that would be great. (I don't just mean fix it for your application - if you could brush up with your roleplaying, and typing overall.)
My apologies if I sounded rude or harsh.